SANDSTORM

I was walking in the desert of kings and queens when the ground started to rumble and shake! I fell to my knees and tried to get right back up but couldn’t because the ground kept on rumbling. I yelled out for help but no one could hear me because I was stranded! It was dusty and the sand in my eyes was painful. All of the giraffes were running away and the sand sang as it whizzed past my face at high speed! I tried to run away but the rumble of the ground kept me on my knees.

2 Replies to “SANDSTORM”

  1. Kia ora Zac, from New Zealand.
    Nice writing Zac. I like the natural way that you introduced the giraffes to the piece, amidst all of the sand as it whizzed past. That is a nice piece of description.
    When you get a chance come on and have a look at my class blog at https://rakau19.edublogs.org/
    Ms M #100WC

  2. Hi Zac,
    I enjoyed reading your story. Well done.
    It is very well written and you included 4 out of the 5 words seamlessly. You seem to have forgotten pink.
    You’ve aroused my interest and I’d love to know more about this desert of kings and queens.
    Good work this week.

    Mrs Boyce (Team 100WC)
    Cork.
    Ireland

    https://mrsboycesclass.100wc.net/

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